So this week I have changed the structure on my essay and feel it is a lot less disjointed. My only concern would be the integration on my survey following the potential consequences. Erin has read my essay again today and has helped me to re-word my title again as my essay is covering so much, so its so important to have a title that summarizes the whole think. In the half term I’m going to go through and sort out my foot noting and bibliography so it is at a high standard before I get an English teacher to read it. I will also research how to write the evaluation.